Fifth Grade

Champion Learners

The Tiny Puppy Accident

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Written by Alicia for the 100 Word Challenge

One day Mars ran downstairs to a box at her door.  Curiously she took it inside and carefully opened it.  “AHHHHH,” Mars said as a puppy jumped out of the box.  “Aww it’s so cute,” said Mars.  “Mom I found a box with a puppy in it outside can we keep it pls!!” Mars said exaggerated.  Mars’ mom came running. “Ahh this is perfect! I bought a collar online yesterday, let’s try it on,” said Mars’ mom.  As they tried to put the collar on and it didn’t fit.  If only if it was a bit smaller. 

2 Comments

  1. Alicia,
    Wow! I can tell Mars was excited by the ‘surprise’, but I feel like the Mom had planned the whole thing. That little collar gave her plan away in my mind.
    Keep writing.
    Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA

  2. This is a lovely story! I liked the way you used punctuation to show us the mood. Well done!

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