Fifth Grade

Champion Learners

A Battle to Survive 

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Written by Caden for the 100 word challenge

 She looked confused. “What?” I sighed, frustrated. “You step onto to the lower sword,” I explained. “Then you step onto the higher one. Then you pulled out the lower sword and wedge into the wall right above you. You do this until you reach the top. Get it?” Realization spread across her face. She started to climb. As she did, she said, “That tiger was weird. That black smoke…like a flash of light, then, darkness. thought about that. After she got to the top, she tossed the swords down. I came up slowly with Jason. The trees were waiting. 

 

 

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  1. Hello Caden,
    What a fantastic submission to this week’s 100 WC! I am nominating your entry for the 100 WC showcase. My favorite line was “The trees were waiting.” I, as a reader, am waiting for more! One suggestion is to changed ‘pulled’ to ‘pull’ in your sentence where you are describing how to climb as the verb tense is not consistent with the others.
    Keep writing!
    Francine (Team 100)
    Twin Cities, Minnesota USA

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