Fifth Grade

Champion Learners

Treasure 

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Written by Brynlee for the 100 word challenge

My name is Ke ana. I love looking in caves for treasure on this island of Hawaii, so my name fits me well. One day, as I was searching in a cave with my sister Honu Kai, we fell into a deep hole. “Maikaʻi paha ‘oe?” Honu Kai asked. “Ya, I’m okay,” I replied. “We better get out of here though.” “Look!” said Honu Kai. Strait ahead we saw a opening in the cave that led out side.  We followed the light and found that it lead to a flat area with lots of treasure. “Waiwai!” I almost shouted. “We need to tell makuahine me makuakāne about this!” “But where did it go?” she shouted back. And just like that, the treasure was gone! 

 

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  1. Hello Brynlee, what a mystery! I think using the first person and narrating the story worked really well. It was like you were including me in the story. How wonderful it would be to find a treasure but awful for it to disappear. Well done.

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