Fifth Grade

Champion Learners

The Hospital

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Written by Logan for the 100 word challenge

Abby was walking down the hall to see his brother currently he felt really illAs Abby was walking down the hall of the hospital, she saw many sick people but only one caught her attention Abby wanted to be a Nero surgeon and she saw a boy getting surgery on his brain. But then Abby got a text from her mom and it said Kermit is going to be okay. Abby rushed down with joy and saw her brother and hugged him.   

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  1. Hi Logan. Hospital is certainly a good setting for this weeks prompt writing.
    I’m a little confused by the phrasing at the beginning. I wonder if you could read it again and think about how you might make it easier for your reader to understand.
    Do you think you might aspire to becoming a neuro surgeon too?
    Thanks for sharing,
    Jackie (Team 100WC)
    New Zealand

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